No winners
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The words
he muttered
Left me gutted
Rain had started
We split and parted
Two bodies
one soul
we never planned it
Long haul.
It wasn't 'Hips' ,
'bits' and
'fingertips'
It was Screams,
Fits and
Heart rips.
There he goes
smiling,
whilst inside he's
hiding.
Underneath the
leather
skin,
and all the b*ll
that goes Within.
To think that once
he had a soul,
Only, picked me up
to watch me fall
The last piece
of thinning thread
I stumble and crawl
as i tread.
Everyone watching
Whilst I hold ON
There goes him
thinking
he won.
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martian?! haha THANK YOU.
Your feedback is always as sweet as sugar. and the less words the better sometimes hehe I tend to keep it short, but am going long haul soon =) so keep an eye
It's your style that I admire in fact.
=)
LOVE this - have a situation happening close to me (not me personally) that this fits perfectly!! Will have to show this.
Thank you HopefulPoet
Nice poetry, great style. I will read some more of your poems.
thank you :: Mark Bronze:: :)
Love can hurt at times and things can happen in love. You write about this so eloquently and I love it. You have a nice minimalist way to putting sentences together, with the fewest words possible sometimes, and it is a great style. I always enjoy your work. Thank you.
You put a very great voice to the pains of the heart. A lovely read.
Thank you all
Leptirela, glad to make your acquaintance, and thanks for the visit. I love your poetry, so quick so plaina so deep.Peter
epigramman 18 months ago
...well I have always loved your poetic style - it takes one to know one as they say - lol lol - and you can convey so much with so few well chosen words - in fact your words smolder with burning delight and though this particular episoide did not end so well - you always approach life and conflict from a solid philosophical stance .......